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Band 5.5

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of world forest and timber in five different nations namely, South Africa, Africa, Asia, Europe and North America.

The pie graph
provide
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 information about the proportion of global
forest
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forests
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 and timber in all continents, except
of
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Oceania and Antarctica.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that North
America
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 has one of the
most
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largest
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part
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parts
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 in two aspects
separetly
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separately
. Another striking feature is that
,
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 Africa
on
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 top of the list by forests, but
heat
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has
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 a trough of
timbers
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timber
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. Looking at the details, as regards forest, Africa has the
most
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largest
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 27 per
cent
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.
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hand
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 North
America
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 has one-fourth, Europe has 18 per
cent
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and
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, and
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other
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others
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 have around
one-eights
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one-eighth
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.
By contrast
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, when it
come
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 to timber, it goes in
the
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another direction.
For instance
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, North
America
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 has almost one-third
and
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, and
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 Europe has one-fifth,
half
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apply
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of all together .
Nevertheless
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, Africa has a mere nine per
cent
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, Asia has twice
of
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this
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, and South
America
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 accounted for 23 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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