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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion.

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in the number
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 of talented
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individuals.
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, doctors and teachers
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traviling
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travelling
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low-income
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countries
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 to work in
high income
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countries
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.In
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discusse
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discuss
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 what troubles may cause ,and give my opinion. On the one hand,the government can attract companies to invest in
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its country
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countries
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create
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creating
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 more opportunities for the professionals and
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dramaticaly
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dramatic
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 employment.
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then
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and then
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 open the gate of applicants.
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,the number of talented
people
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 who are
traviling
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travelling
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countries
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becouse
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because
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 find more
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chances
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 than
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country
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own country
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,
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gradually
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help
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helps
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 the economy of their
country
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,if professionals leave their
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hard
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a hard
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 their
country
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 of their
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 may face
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a sharply
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sharply decreased
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,when they leave their
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countries
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countries,
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 it
cause
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causes
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to
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them problems.
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 as,more congestion,decreasing the chance for citizens of
emplyment
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employment
 and
may
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the
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professionals
talk
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may speak
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 different
language
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languages
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which
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make
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can cause
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 slight difficulty when they cannot understand each other.
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,
people
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 in both
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 are going to compete for the jobs. In conclusion,in my opinion,
government
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the government
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 should guide their
people
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 and contract with enormous companies to invest in the poorer
countries
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.
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,
this
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invented
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 many troubles
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,
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i
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I
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 think the beneficial solution is
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 and
convence
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convince
people
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 by their government to stay
in
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at
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 home.

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language
Fix grammar and spell words so the writing is easy to read
structure
Plan your work with a clear order: problem, cause, effect, then fix
cohesion
Use small linking words to join ideas, like and, but, also, then
content
Give more real examples or numbers to back your point
content
Make your own view clear in the end
structure
The essay shows the writer sees both sides of the issue
content
It ends with a view from the writer
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Economic growth
  • Global inequality
  • Incentive programs
  • Capacity building
  • Reintegration programs
  • Workforce saturation
  • Skilled migration
  • Local services
  • Professional retention
  • Developing country
  • Developed country
  • Healthcare systems
  • Educational services
  • Career development opportunities
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