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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart compares the
water
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 usage for three particular sectors in 2000,
while
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 the bar diagram records the
proportion
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 over those three categories in four different countries in the same year. In general,
agriculture
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absorb
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absorbs
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the
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a
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 huge amount of
water
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 compared to others.
In addition
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, India reports a considerable
proportion
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 of
water
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 use,
whereas
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 Canada is the
leading
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leader
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for
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in
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 industry utilisation, and New Zealand propose
the
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a
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 balance in
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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 and domestic sectors. In 200, a significant
proportion
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 of
water
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 was utilised for agricultural
field
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fields
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, which comprised 70%, representing the highest unit. Industry placed
the
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apply
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second,
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amounting to just over a fifth, and the remaining 8% was for
domestical
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domestic
 needs as the lowest slice. In detail, India was responsible for a considerable utilisation
for
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of
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 farmland, nearly 100% of its figure.
Chine
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China
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also
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 had
the
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a
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 high
proportion
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 for
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector, which amounted to 69%. New Zealand,
by contrast
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, succeed
balancing
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in balancing
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 their usage between
agriculture
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 and domestic, reporting nearly 45% for each.
Furthermore
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, 80% of Canada
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is fouccused
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fouccused
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focused
for
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on
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 manufacturing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, proportion, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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