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As part of education, students should spend a period of time studying and living in a different country to learn a different language and culture. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that
students
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 should spend a period of time studying abroad in a different country to learn a different
langauge
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language
 and culture.
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 partially agree with
this
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 statement as
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 very helpful and useful to gain a broader understanding of
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world
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the world
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. On one hand, living and studying in a different country may help
students
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 to be more
indepandent
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independent
 and discover new solutions for many issues we come across.
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, studying abroad may lead to
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 more knowledge about the
world
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 for many different subjects,
such
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 as science, medicine, history, and chemistry
to
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 uncover hidden answers for many questions across the
world
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.
On the other hand
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, living and studying abroad may seem easy, but
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 quite the opposite as there are some major flaws.
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, communicating in another language for some
students
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 is a difficult task as they are not used to
talk
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 to native people using their language
fearing
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, fearing
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 any misunderstanding.
To conclude
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,
although
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 living and studying abroad is a difficult task for some
students
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 as there are some flaws. I strongly believe that living and studying for
students
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 in a different country will eventually enhance their
understading
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understanding
 about the
world
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 and gain more knowledge
and
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, and
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 be more
indepandent
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independent
.

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task response
Make your main view more clear. You say 'partially agree' first, but at the end you say 'strongly believe'. Keep one clear view from start to end.
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Add one or two clear and real examples. Your ideas are general now, so they do not fully support your points.
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Explain each main point more. For example, say how study abroad helps language learning, culture learning, or future work.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each body paragraph. This helps the reader follow your plan more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Some sentences jump too fast from one idea to another.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph endings and sentence links. A few parts feel unfinished or not fully connected.
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You answer the topic and discuss both sides.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your main ideas are easy to understand in most parts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • cultural awareness
  • global perspectives
  • pronunciation
  • adaptability
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  • personal growth
  • social awareness
  • resumes
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