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Earlier working from home was discouraged. Nowadays, many organizations are encouraging telecommuting. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Support your opinion with examples.

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 decades, workers were not encouraged to work remotely
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 In
modren
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modern
society
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society,
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 many
organizations
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organisations
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 are encouraging them to work remotely
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 Working online has a significant impact on individuals recently
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 The advantages of
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working online it
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the
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employees to save money on transportation and time
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,Many individuals argue that working offline
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 expenses
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, Online working reduces from 40 to 70% of expenses over the world
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, People can work for international companies without concerns. The disadvantages of working online
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 detrimental
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 the
naturalty
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naturality
 of humans.To illustrate, many employees may feel isolated
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 some of them find it difficult to concentrate at home
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, working offline can advance the
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environment
 steadily,
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 of that, it
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 the
communiction
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communication
 ability for workers.
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 working online may reduce social interaction, it provides many advantages
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 as saving time and reducing expenses.

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Answer all parts of the task more fully. You talk about good and bad points, but your ideas are short.
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Give clearer examples. The example about 40 to 70% of costs does not feel clear or well shown.
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Make your main ideas easier to understand. Some lines are hard to follow because of word choice and grammar.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer paragraph plan. One paragraph for good points and one for bad points is good, but each point needs better support.
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Link ideas in a more natural way. Some link words are used, but a few do not fit the meaning well.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect clearly to the next one. Now some ideas jump too fast.
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You answer the topic and discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
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You have a short conclusion that gives your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph shape, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You use some link words like for instance, however, furthermore, and to conclude.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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