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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropoloists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart compares the proportion of Anthropology graduates who vary in six destinations after completing their degrees,
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 the table informs their salary in 5
year
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years
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 working under three different employments. Generally speaking, most graduates
favor
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 permanent working compared to other categories
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in
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on
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 the other hand,
they
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those
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 who take up
career
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careers
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 in the government sector and freelance
consultant
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consultants
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 earn the highest salaries. Concerning the graduate selections, it is evident that the majority of them (52%)
favor
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 full-time employment, meanwhile,
slight
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 slice of them struggle as freelancers (15%) and unemployed (12%).
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, fewer
of
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individuals continue their postgraduate
schools
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studies
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, which amounted to 8%. That figure corresponds to the
overall
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 salaries they
earned
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, which 80% of Anthropologists in freelance companies and government institutions receive an immense wage (75,000$-100,000$).
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, the remaining 20% are paid less than 74,999$. Private companies, in comparison, are less promising, which are half of their staff earn a comparable salary (75,000$-100,000$), meanwhile
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 45% offer the lowest figure (<74,999$).

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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