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Band 2.5

Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook and Whatsapp have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree.

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recent
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global digital development,
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 usage of social networking sites and
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exposure
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 online
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platforms
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have
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 significantly increased. These platforms
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 as Facebook and
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WhatsApp
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Whatsapp
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Whatsapp,
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 are used by people around the world to do a lot of stuff
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 to build
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connection
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connections
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between
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 each
others
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, to share certain documents,
as well as
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 to call
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their
partner
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. Whether social networking sites create a negative or positive
impact
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 on both
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the individual
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 and society is relatively debatable. In
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what
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its net
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 general. Social
media
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 can create a wider
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 because it can
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be beneficial
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 for communication between different
area
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areas
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. Social
media
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provide
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 a platform for chatting and calling.
Moreover
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, it can share many documents
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 documents, videos, or other
type
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 of files.
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, it can
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 a huge negative
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social
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media
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a potential
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 bad
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 sharing
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bad content,
media
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 for crime, and phishing. With the
benefit
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 and the challenges,
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I
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 think that social networking sites have a more positive
impact
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 on both
individual
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the individual
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 and society. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement of negative
impact
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Write a clear answer to the question in the first paragraph. Say if you agree, disagree, or agree in part.
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Add one main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it more.
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Use one or two real and clear examples to support your ideas.
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Make your opinion the same from start to end. Now your view is not fully clear until the end.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple essay plan: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some ideas now jump too fast.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion in the end.
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You mention both good and bad sides of social media.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some link words are used, such as however and moreover.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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