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The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The column graphs compare the number of
hours
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 spent working per
week
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 by industrial
workers
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 in France, Denmark, Sweden and the UK in 2002. Generally, in three countries, it
was
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 obviously
represents
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represented
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 that the maximum hour for working
is
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hours are
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 36-40
hours
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.
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 in France, the maximum
hours
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is
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are
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 31-35 per
week
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. The majority of working
hours
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 in France accounted for 50%. The next most common category was 36–40
hours
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, at 35%, which is the standard working time in
other
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the other
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 three countries.
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, some
workers
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 spent 46–50
hours
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 working per
week
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, accounting for 20%. The remaining working-hour categories were around 10–15%.
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, in Denmark and Sweden, they spent 70% and 80% of
workers
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 respectively worked between 36 and 40
hours
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 per
week
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, which is the highest percentage among the other countries. In Denmark, about 20% of
worker
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workers
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spent
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spend
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 31-35
hours
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 working per
week
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 .
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, the rest of the working
hours
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 accounted for around 10%. Meanwhile, in Sweden, the second and third percentages come from
31
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the 31
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-35 hour and 41-45 hour categories, at around 35% and 25% respectively. The rest of
working
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the working
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hours
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 category accounted for around 10-20%
Lastly
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, in the UK has 50% of
workers
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worked
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work
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 36-40
hours
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. Some
workers
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also
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 worked more than 50
hours
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 per
week
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, accounting for over 20%, which is the second highest after minimum
hours
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. The working
hours
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. around 41-45 and 46-50, accounted for about 15% and 19% respectively. The other
hours
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are accounting
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account
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 for around10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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