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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touh with other people and get news events.Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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this
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recent
time
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times
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, the main source
for
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of
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 communication is social
media
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. In
this
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tecnologic based
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technology-based
 world, social
media
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 is a normal and
convinient
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convenient
 thing.In many
countries
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countries,
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 they always
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rely
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 on their mobile phone
for
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to
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 communicate with others and get
the
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apply
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updated
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updates
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 about their country. Not only
social
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do social
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media
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 have advantages for people
but
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, but
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also
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they also
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it
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have
disatvantages
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disadvantages
 at the same time.
This
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eassy
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essay
 will examine the advantages and disadvantages of using social
media
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 before my comprehension.
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 the one hand , by using social
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media
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media,
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 we can enhance our knowledge and
also
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 get
latest
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the latest
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 updates . Social
media
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make
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makes
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 our life more enjoyable and
convinient
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convenient
. We can learn more and more about the whole world by using social
media
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, and it helps us to communicate with our close
one's
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ones
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.We can pass our important
new
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news
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 by tipping and
also
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 make calls in one click.
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other
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the other
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 hand, by using social
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media
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media,
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 we got influenced by many
tings
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things
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.It can be dangerous for us .Which
also
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bring
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brings
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 various problems in our life .
However
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,
tecnological
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technological
 goods
such
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 as mobile
phone
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phones
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,
computer
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computers
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 have negative energy ,
wich
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which
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 is harmful
for
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to
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human
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the human
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 body .
Thats
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 how
by
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apply
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using it all
the
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day can damage our health condition.
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, in my
comprehension
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opinion
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,
it is clear that
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 by using social
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media
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media,
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 there are
less
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more
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advantages
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disadvantages
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 than
disadvantages
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advantages
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. which are more harmful
for
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to
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 our physical
health
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apply
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and mental health.

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task response
Answer the question more clearly. You say the bad points are stronger, but your ideas are not fully explained.
task response
Give one or two clear examples to support your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one main idea and explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully, for example: On the one hand, On the other hand, In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences do not connect well. Check that each sentence follows the one before it.
task response
You answer both sides of the topic and give your opinion at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The main topic is clear in most parts of the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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