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Band 3

Some people have vehicle free days where cars , motorcycles and bikes are banned. Only buses, and taxis are permitted. Do the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.

It
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 argued whether implementing vehicle-free days, during which personal cars and other private transport
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, is the best choice. In
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 will discuss whether
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 initiative is beneficial
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 or
complete
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a complete
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 waste of time.
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 one hand, there
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 a lot of
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benefits
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 of blocking cars for limited days
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throughout
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 the year to clear the road and air
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 purposes
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 population came
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 the idea in order to have
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,
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,
for
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people
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have a free
day
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 where they can walk by themselves, for health reasons and health awareness. Society members came up with
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 idea for
mulitiple
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multiple
 reasons, leading them to encourage the rest to drive less and to walk more
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 of the main advantages
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 that people did not expect was
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that cars
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cars
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car
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 accidents
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declined 15%
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because
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day
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 they
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.
In
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 the other hand,
deterimental
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detrimental
 impact was there,
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 are a lot of people concerned about
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 the idea,
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because
 they went through a lot of struggles in order to follow restricted personal transport, being late for
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 appointments and their
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special associations
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conclucion
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conclusion
, what
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 see, in my personal perspective,
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 believe the
advanges
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advantages
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outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks
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 the
benefical
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beneficial
 things that
happining
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happen
, and the individuals who
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 going through bad timing can
rescheduale
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reschedule
 earlier since the
day
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 is already on a specific
day
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 each year, and they can
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 avoid any meeting
in
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on
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 that
day
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.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
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Give one or two clear examples to support each main idea.
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Develop ideas more. Some points are too general and need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and sentence form, because some parts are hard to follow.
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You answered both sides of the question and gave your opinion in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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You tried to use an example about fewer car accidents.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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