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Q. Some people say that excessive noise should be a criminal offence, while others say they should be free to make noise without limitation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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individuals
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sound
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unlawful
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noise pollution should not be
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This
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 of making
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noise
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noice
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noise
 makers , because it
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 our
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society's
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prosperity
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, creating too much
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noice
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noise
 can lead to
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someone's
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 patients.
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 that sixty out of
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 patients lost their lives
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extreme
 exposure to
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 critics of
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 notion advocate that people who
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inject
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 country and sometimes playing loud music is the way of celebration in certain cultures
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, charging them for
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making noise
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 will be
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disrespectful
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 community.
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firmly believe that making too much
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noice
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noise
 should be a criminal offence , because the fact is beyond
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doubt
 that it is directly affecting
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 in our society. And as far as celebration is
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 be done by the
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permission
 of the city council in a place where
sound
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 does not have
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adverse
affect
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effects
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 on individuals.

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task response
For task response, answer all parts more clearly. You discuss both sides and give your view, which is good, but some ideas are too short.
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For task response, explain your main points more. Say why noise should be a crime, and why some people want freedom, with clearer reasons.
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For task response, use examples carefully. Your example about heart patients is relevant, but it needs clearer wording and it may sound too strong without support.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear 4-part shape: intro, one side, other side, conclusion. This helps the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences are hard to follow because grammar and word choice break the flow.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, develop each paragraph with one main idea and support it step by step. Now some points are made, but not fully built.
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You answer the full question: both views are discussed and your own opinion is clear.
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Your position is easy to see in the last paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
You use a clear essay form with an opening and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Words like 'On the other hand' help show the change in view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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