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The chart below gives information about our families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and may comparisons wher relevant.

This
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 bar chart provides key information about
our
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how our
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 families in
specific
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a specific
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 country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the highest spending in 1968
,
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apply
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 was on food,
whereas
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 the lowest
spent
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was
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 on fuel and power in
same
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the same
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 year.
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, in
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2018, the highest
spent
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spending
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 was on leisure
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while
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, while
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 the lowest
spent
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spending
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 was on both personal goods, fuel and power.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1968, a considerable
percent
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percentage
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 of the weekly income was spent on food by almost 35%.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
housing
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, housing
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, clothing, and
footware
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footwear
 are 10% individually.
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, all leisure, transport, personal goods and household
goats
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goods
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 are exactly the same in the
spinding
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spending
 by only less than 10% individually. In terms of 2018, the spending in all items is less than in 1968 except housing, transport and leisure
which
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, which
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 are higher than 1968 by approximately 5 - 10 percentages.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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