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The diagram below shows how recycled paper is made.

The diagram below shows how recycled
paper
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 is made.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the whole
process
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 can be divided into four main steps
making
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: making
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pulp
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 , filtering , cleaning
and
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, and
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then
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 the
last
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 stage is making
paper
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 . In the first step
used
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,
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paper
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 in the form of unfiltered
pulp
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 is put into
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a
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conveyor belt and addded
water
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chemicals
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and chemicals
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in
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are added in
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 the
process
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 of making
pulp
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 .
The next step is
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 filtering the
pulp
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 after adding
water
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chemicals
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and chemicals
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 . The third step is cleaning , filtered
pulp
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 is cleaned in
mechanism
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a mechanism
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 which provides soap
water
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 and air
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,
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which makes the
process
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 more
effectively
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effective
. The
pulp
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 is again watered and
added chemicals
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chemicals are added
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 in the cleaning
process
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 before the
last
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 stage. Cleaned
pulp
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 is put in conveyor belt with heated rollers to eliminate the
water
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 from the
paper
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 and
added
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add
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 ink . After 4 stages of work , recycled
paper
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 is made .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, process, pulp, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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