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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college adminisllator. In your letter • say which part-time course you booked • explain why you need to cancel your booking • ask about booking a different course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you concerning my selection of software development as my part-time
course
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, from which I will need to opt
out
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out,
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 as it will not align with my current study plans. As my full-time diploma is for business analysis, I assumed getting a rough idea of various software would help me succeed in the program. But I recently checked my full
course
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 outline
and
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 it already covers all the required software which will help me in the class.
Secondly
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, I
also
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 wanted to know whether I can switch my part-time
course
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, and if I can, I would like to get myself enrolled in a culinary and cooking program
as
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this
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course
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 will help me develop some life skills. Waiting for a positive response from your side.
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, let me know any additional information you need from my side to make a swap to a different program. Yours faithfully, Darshan

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add more clear detail about the new course you want.
task response
Task response: Use a more formal line at the end, for example, 'I look forward to your reply.'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order, but one paragraph has two main ideas. Split them for better control.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like 'First', 'Also', and 'Therefore' to guide the reader.
task response
Task response: You clearly say which course you booked and why you want to cancel it.
task response
Task response: You ask about changing to a different course, so the purpose is clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are correct for a formal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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