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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate an island, before and after the construction of a few travel facilities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 it used to be an empty island, with no accommodation,
nor
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restaurants, or any tourist facilities, unlike the second map, where it showed improvements, new buildings, and a better place for visitors.
According to
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 what is shown, before development, the island only had some trees on the west and east
side
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, with no buildings, but after development, a reception was built,
along with
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 restaurants, piers, easing the way for people with boats
,
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and
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 ships
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 to pass by, and over 15 accommodations.
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, a track was made for vehicles, making it easier for visitors with cars to pass,
as well as
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 side walks, known as footpaths, plus making the beach
avaliable
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available
 for swimming, enhancing
tourists
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tourists'
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 experience.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before development / after development
  • natural island
  • tourist facilities
  • reception
  • restaurant
  • pier
  • vehicle track
  • footpath
  • huts
  • to the north/south/east/west of
  • in the center of the island
  • was built / were added
  • remained unchanged
  • the main change
  • became more developed
  • connected by paths
  • used for swimming
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