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The graph illustrates the percentage of materials recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The given line graph presents information regarding
reuse
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the reuse
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 rate for chosen elements over
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period
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a period
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 of 28 years, from 1982 to 2010. The data is presented in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that there was a significant upward trend in
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans ,
while
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paper
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 and
cardboard
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 and glass containers experienced a fluctuating pattern.
Additionally
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, plastics remained relatively stable throughout the
period
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.
It is clear that
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of
paper
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 and
cardboard
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rate
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rates
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 dominated over a given
period
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.
Initially
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, in 1982,
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 started at about 65%. It
then
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 increased to 70% by 1986.
Following
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this
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 ,
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 experienced a slight drop before peaking at 80% in 1994. By the end of the
period
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, in 2010,the figure for
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 stood at 70%.
Similarly
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, glass containers began the
period
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 with approximately 50% in 1982.It
then
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 decreased steadily to 40% by 1990 and
subsequently
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 increased gradually to 60% in 2010.
In contrast
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 to plastics ,
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans showed a completely different pattern. Starting at about 5% in 1986 , its figure significantly climbed to approximately 45% in 2010.
At the end
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 of the
period
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,
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans hit
the
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their
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 highest point. Notably, plastics
was
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were
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 significantly lower than
paper
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 and
carboard
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cardboard
 for
the
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apply
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most of the
period
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, particularly in 1994 when it reached about 10% compared to 80% for
paper
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 and
carboard
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cardboard
.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, paper, cardboard with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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