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Nowadays the number of students who migrate abroad for higher education has been significantly increased. Mention advantages and disadvantages of it.

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 is often
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debated
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children
study
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 abroad for higher
educations
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education
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. In my
opnion
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opinion
, I
extrmally
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extremely
 believe that education
out side
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outside
 has many of the benefit. In reality, many
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people believe that wasting
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time and money.
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, others prefer
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 their students for cuontey their
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studies
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prespectives
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perspectives
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 my view. competitive On the one hand, A lot of people prefer
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 their students abroad. For manily reason,
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they
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 will
back
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go back
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 to improve the industry in their country. As
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,
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 there are 65% more companies from the Information technology sector in Riyadh compared to ten
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years ago
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 opened a lot of new jobs.
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additionally
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,
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 have a job with
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 high salary, you are more competitive.
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 as, the occupation
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 software developer increase a salary
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last
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 to 30% comparing past the years.
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, families often prefer their child
near
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 them. For a lot of reasons,
first,
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they always say that
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be
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study
internal
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internally
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, offer money and keep them a front
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,
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 universities
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lost
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approximately 40 to 50 % because of the scholarship program at the time.
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, it seems advisable that the decision to keep should be based
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 and their ability. I
am high
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 recommend that might out to made balnce between
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life and study cycles, especially for students in early age. In conclusion, it seems advisable that the decision to keep should be based
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 and their ability. I
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 recommend that studying abroad is more useful on quality of life.

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. Say what the good points are and what the bad points are in each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea easy to see. Put one clear topic sentence at the start of each paragraph.
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Explain your examples more. Show how each example supports your point.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, however, and overall.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same ending idea in the last two paragraphs.
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Give a clearer opinion from start to end. Your view should stay the same all through the essay.
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You answered the topic and tried to talk about both good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body paragraphs, and an ending.
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You used some examples about jobs, money, and family support.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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