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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.

The given line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
inquiries
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recieved
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received
 by a Tourist Information Office of a City over six months in 2011.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of enquiries received via telephone and in person increased continuously during
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 timeframe
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while
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 the
inquiries
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 received via email/letter gradually declined during
this
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 period. As indicated in the graph, the
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 of
inquiries
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 received via email/letter hovered around 700 in January to March
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 which it substantially declined to approximately 300 in May-June.
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, the
number
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 of
inquiries
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 received by both in person and
telephone
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by telephone
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 increased simultaneously.
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, most of the expats preferred
in person
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in-person
inquiries
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 to telephone
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 evidenced by the figure fluctuating from 400 in January to 1,800 in June.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, inquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inquiries = questions from people
  • in person = by visiting the office
  • by telephone = by phone
  • by letter/email = in written form
  • go up = rise / increase
  • go down = fall / decrease
  • steadily = slowly and regularly
  • sharply = quickly and a lot
  • overtake = become higher than
  • the highest = the most
  • the lowest = the least
  • at the beginning of the period
  • by the end of the period
  • from January to June
  • overall, it is clear that...
  • the number of inquiries
  • show an upward trend
  • show a downward trend
  • remain stable = stay the same
  • make a comparison
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