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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The pictures illustrate the transformation of
waterfront
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the waterfront
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area
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 in Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
Overall
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, the residential
area
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 and green
space
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 are well developed throughout the time period,
whereas
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the
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apply
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certain places remain the same. As we can see, in the
nothern
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northern
 part of the place, there was some industrial
area
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 beside the lake in 2009.
That
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Those
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 places were constructed into a swimming pool,
while
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 the lake and forest
still
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were still
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 unchanged in 2014. The school, the convention
center
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centre
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, and the fishing
area
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 were not rebuilt over the following year. In the southern part of the map, the major development was residential
building
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buildings
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 and
the
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apply
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green
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space
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spaces
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. In 2014, the green
space
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 overtook
industrial
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the industrial
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area
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.
Furthermore
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, some buildings were added for pubic
space
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,
such
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 as
university
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a university
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bulding
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building
 and
additional
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an additional
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resident
Replace the word
residential
area
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.
Moreover
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, in
southwest
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the southwest
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 of the map, the new harbour was constructed near the sea.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, space with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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