You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter •describe the vacation spot you have chosen •explain how you plan to spend your time there •invite your friend to join you on your vacation Begin your letter as follows: Dear….

Dear April, How are you? I hope you're doing well. Actually, I'm planning to go to the Philippines on January 16. I've chosen the place where we
go
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is Cebu City
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. I lived in Cebu City for a long time before. That's why I'm very familiar with it. We are going to the mountain, the beach, and so on. We'll eat delicious food like Mang Inasal or Lechon. And
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, I'm planning to reunite with some of my Filipino friends. They can take us to a special place. Honestly, I really want to go there with you. Just let me know if you want to come with me. I've already invited some of our friends from middle school. I look forward to meeting you soon. I hope you can join our trip. Take care of yourself. My friend, Kazuya

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task response
Answer all parts more fully. Say more about the place, your plan, and why your friend should come.
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Use a clear friendly tone all the way. Some lines sound a bit formal or not natural.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas flow more clearly with simple link words like first, then, also, and because.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make the letter easier to read.
task response
You answered all three parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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