Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people’s lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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people
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global
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became that strong and explain why
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influenced by global
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create global
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. In my opinion,
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can bind
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the rights
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of
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who pretends more unique
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designs.
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dislike them.
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because global
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what we should wear.
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some negative sides. In conclusion,
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modern
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is strongly influenced by global
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like their idols. I believe it is
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a negative
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development of modern
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design
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Answer both parts more fully. Say more clearly how world fashion gets strong power, and why it is bad.
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Give more clear main ideas in each body part. One main idea, then explain it, then give one example.
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Use examples that are more real and exact. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences clearer. The first line of each body part should show the main point well.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Some lines repeat the same idea, so the essay can feel a bit hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. Keep all lines in one paragraph close to one main point.
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You answered both questions in the task.
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Your opinion is clear: you think this is a negative development.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear basic structure: introduction, body, body, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like 'for example', 'furthermore', and 'in conclusion'.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • global
  • trend
  • fashion
  • style
  • fashionable
  • influencer
  • celebrity
  • brand
  • access
  • marketing
  • popular
  • worldwide
  • connect
  • showcase
  • event
  • clothing
  • culture
  • rise
  • buy
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