The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

the
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The
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chart illustrates the amount of manufacture of 3 variety of spreads
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such
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, such
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as margarine,
low fat
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low-fat
, and butter
between
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, between
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the years 1981
-
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and
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2007. its crystal clear that the consumption of margarine and butter has decreased,
when low fat
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while low-fat
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and reduced spreads
witnessed
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have witnessed
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a sharp increase.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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