The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the steps of spaghetti manufacturing. The eight stepS are used to get the final product. First of all, we can see the flour is stored in the silos.
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, flour is added to water and oil.
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, a mixture will be produced by the mixer. After a few manufacturing processes, flour can be used to make noodles. In the cooking
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,the mixture is converted into some shapes, which we can see in the final packet. After that, noodles will be added to some flavours,
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as vegetables and spices, which are
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what the
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customer needs.
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,after a few processes, it is moved to the labelling and sealing
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.
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, we can see the final product in the cups. In conclusion, these eight steps can be divided into four main phases. Those are the storage
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, the mixture creating
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, the noodles making
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and the labelling and sealing
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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