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Some people belive that space travel is a waste of government money while others believe it is important for human development. Discuss these views and give your opinion

Some people believe that space travel is a misuse of public
funds
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funds,
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while
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 others consider
it
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that it
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is
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apply
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plays an important role in human development. The government's financial resources primarily
relates
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relate
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 directly to us,we invest in
this
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promotes
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,
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 and every year more and more.For people's lives,the discoveries in space that have already taken place are certainly phenomenal
but
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apply
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also
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,
we
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but we
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 should
remember
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also remember
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 one thing. At the moment,we do not have extra funds to promote
such
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larg-scole
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large-scale
 studies of celestial bodies and flights,we still learn about human diseases,we
up to know
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still
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 do not know what is under the water,we still do not know about earth

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Write both sides of the topic. Now you mainly talk about one side.
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Give your opinion in a clear sentence in the introduction or end.
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Add one or two simple examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: intro, side 1, side 2, opinion, end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like because, but, so, first, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Finish the essay with a short conclusion.
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You show the main topic clearly: space travel and public money.
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You try to explain why some people do not support space travel.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas follow a basic order and are easy to see.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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