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The growing prevalence of fake news and misinformation is a concern for many. What measures can be taken to promote media literacy and ensure that individuals have access to accurate and reliable information?

The renowned American Historian, Daniel J.
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Boorstin,
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 once said: “The greatest obstacle to discovery is not ignorance but the illusion of knowledge.”
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 is a quote that has deeply affected the way I see the world, and I perceive most essentially what we call “knowledge”. Perhaps, what Boorstin means when he says the illusion of knowledge is that it refers to the fact that we as human beings have adopted
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 false narrative that we do know everything, even when we actually don’t.
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, let me make one thing clear for you
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 in today's world, you in fact don’t know anything…
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 is the paradox of the contemporary world. We live in a digital age, which makes us feel extremely lucky
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 the fact that we have access to a vast amount of
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 with the rising digitalization. Now, finding
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 is just one button away from you.
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,
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 is where the problem arises, not only
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 become easier, but
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 the democratisation of
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 has taken place. In a sense, digital media has enabled the public
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not only
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 but
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 to produce and circulate content. The absence of trust is mainly
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 false
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 and narratives that we are being exposed to on a daily basis. Now, if you think about it for a
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there is a huge surplus of
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 and plus these are not all coming from
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 and reliable sources.
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,
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 matter of trust is very complicated and is an invisible crisis that we as human beings go through. When being subject to
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 false
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, we start building our reality upon false narratives, living our lives based on false beliefs, norms, and values. Presumably, misinformation brings many risks within itself
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 like polarisation, poor decisions made by the public, erosion of democracy and manipulation of people regarding elections, public health and even different types of crises. My personal view of a cautious approach is one that demands transparency in platforms, a more powerful media accountability and increased digital literacy among people.

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Answer the full question more directly. Say clear steps to teach media literacy and to give people true news.
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Add 2 or 3 clear examples, such as school lessons, fact-check websites, or rules for social media.
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Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your points easier to follow.
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Use simpler linking words like First, Also, For example, and In the end.
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Write a short ending that repeats your main answer in a clear way.
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You show a clear understanding of the danger of fake news and why it matters.
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Your ideas about trust, public risk, and digital literacy are relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening and moves from problem to solution.
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Most sentences connect well, and the reader can follow your main message.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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