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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagre

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 agree that we can get a lot about people’s
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 and character from their choice of
clothes
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.Here are my reasons:
Firstly
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culture
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 where people live
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and grow up
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indeed
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 a big influence on their choice of
clothes
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.
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,the obvious cultural differences between the
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East
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 and the
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West
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 result in different clothing styles among people that influenced by them.
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,there are other cultural types around the world,and their clothing is more different.People may be able to tell us where they come from just by looking at their clothing.So,in my opinion,we can be
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told
 a lot about people’s
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 from their
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.
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,A person’s personality can be reflected
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 what they
dress
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wear
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,someone with a positive,outgoing,and energetic personality may wear
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 in bright
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colours
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 and tend to
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follow fashion
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 trends.
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,a
not outgoing
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non-outgoing
 person who often chooses
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 in dark
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colours
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 with simple and basic styles.So,we can basically know what kind of character a person has from their clothing. At least based on my experience,all my friends around me are like
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.So I
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believe
 that a person’s clothing can indeed reflect their
culture
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 and personality.

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Add a full introduction with a clear answer to the question.
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Add one more clear example to make your ideas stronger.
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Explain your main ideas more deeply, not only in a short way.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words so each idea moves more smoothly.
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Check grammar in key sentences because some errors make meaning less clear.
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Make each body paragraph follow one clear point, then explain it step by step.
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You answer the question and clearly show that you agree.
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Your essay has two main reasons, and both are on topic.
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There is a simple ending that repeats your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is easy to follow most of the time.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words like firstly, secondly, for example, and in contrast.
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Each paragraph has one main idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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