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Writing Samples
Band 3

Language teachers should concentrate on giving feedback to students when they do good work, rather than on criticising bad work. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Education helps in shaping individuals and society, it is
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 that language teachers should appreciate
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 for good performance,
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 of
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criticising
. I agree with the former and will
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elaborate
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 in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, if tutors appreciate pupils for their better results, it will help get motivation. If learners get positive
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 for good
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 they certainly feel motivated
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 will
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 them to work harder to achieve
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 results.
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, they will concentrate more
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 studies and their interest
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, studies have shown that positive reinforcement
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, the above reason vividly
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 how
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positive
 feedback can help learners to get motivation. To
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solidify
 my view, positive feedback on good results can help
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 to build confidence. To
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, if they have more confidence, they will be able to solve hard tasks
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this
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 will improve
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performance
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Students
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 can confidently put their ideas, views and points, which help them to
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clarify
 doubts. On the flip side, punishments help
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 to become more
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 rules.
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, appreciation
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 them to become more confident. To
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recapitulate
, tutor
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teaching
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 should give positive feedback to
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 of punishments. I
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strongly believe
 that appreciation
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students
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 to get motivation and confidence for better academic outcomes.

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Answer all parts of the task more fully. You give your view, but you need to explain why the other side is less good in a clearer way.
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Use one clear main idea in each body paragraph, then add a simple reason and a clear example.
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Your example is too general. Add one real or more exact example to support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good. But some ideas do not link well, so the flow is not always smooth.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. Some are good, like 'Moreover' and 'On the flip side', but make sure the next sentence clearly matches the link.
coherence and cohesion
Make your topic sentence very clear at the start of each paragraph, and keep all sentences in that paragraph close to that one idea.
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You clearly give your opinion in the introduction and keep it through the essay.
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You include two main reasons: motivation and confidence. This gives your essay a clear shape.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words to join ideas, such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'However'.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate on
  • positive feedback
  • good work
  • criticising
  • bad work
  • motivate
  • boost confidence
  • discourage
  • demotivate
  • identify strengths
  • build on
  • overwhelming
  • hinder
  • progress
  • balance
  • effective teaching
  • encourage
  • take risks
  • think creatively
  • fear of failure
  • hesitation
  • positive learning environment
  • demoralize
  • negative atmosphere
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