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These days many people prefer working at home instead of going to their working place. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, the majority of
people
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 tend to
work
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 from
home
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instead
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 of going to the
office
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. In
this
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 essay, I will tackle the advantages and disadvantages of it. In
this
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 era, where technologies help us to make our lives easier,
work
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 is one of them. Other
people
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 can
work
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 from
home
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 if their job is related to technology or can be solved online. The advantages of it are that you can easily finish your task without interruption, and at the same time, you can do minimal house chores
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 you’re at
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.
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,
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 will not get too stressed because they can manage their time well and focus on the things that they need to finish.
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, less anxiety and no need to worry too much, like waking up early just to go to
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 and commute every day before going to the
office
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. As well, you can spend more time with your family and friends.
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, the disadvantage of working from
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 is less communication with your peers.
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 working with teammates,
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 interaction and good team support.
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, if you are at the
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, all the members will
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 hard, and can do a lot of team building where communication skills improve.
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, a lot of
people
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 choose to
work
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 from
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 because of the convenience.
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, where everyone can do their own style, they can finish their job and feel calmer than being at the
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, where you can feel the pressure of it.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more equal way. You wrote more about the good side than the bad side.
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Add one more clear bad point, such as feeling alone or having more home distractions.
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Use examples that are more direct and real. Make each example clearly support one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make topic sentences clearer at the start of each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check some sentences because a few ideas do not connect well, especially in the paragraph about the bad side.
task response
You answered the question and wrote about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are easy to follow, especially in the paragraph about the good side of working from home.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • mental energy
  • stress levels
  • professional image
  • morale
  • hygiene
  • absenteeism
  • well-being
  • soothing environment
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • overwhelm
  • efficiency
  • time management
  • individual differences
  • creative chaos
  • organization
  • workspace
  • cleanliness
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