Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing every activity such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays,all
people
think that the best choice to stay fit is to join a Use synonyms
gym
or Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sport
sections,Check wording
sports
while
others believe doing Linking Words
dailly
Correct your spelling
daily
life
Use synonyms
activity
Check wording
activities
such
as walking and running in the parks Linking Words
enough
.In my opinion,both of view is correct because Verb problem
is enough
sport
meaning best Use synonyms
life
forever.
On the one hand,Use synonyms
people
who go to the Use synonyms
gym
and Use synonyms
sport
class preference is stay healthy Use synonyms
Use synonyms
life
and support all things with connection Check wording
lifestyle
sport
.Popular Use synonyms
sport
persons like football Use synonyms
player and
Check wording
players
tennis
Punctuation problem
, tennis
,
Check wording
players,boxer
boxer
,gymnastic always and all day doing exercises.Check wording
boxers
For example
,the famous football player Ronaldo is Linking Words
respect
and Wrong verb form
respected
choice
stay Replace the word
chooses to
sport
person all his Use synonyms
life
.Eating organic foods and proteins,wearing Use synonyms
ecology
clothes and everyday training and running Replace the word
ecological
but
Punctuation problem
, but
Linking Words
this
all items Fix the agreement mistake
these
expensive
for Verb problem
are expensive
under category
Correct word order
people in the under category
people
.And they do not have opportunities to go Use synonyms
gym
and to buy Use synonyms
Linking Words
this
things.
Fix the agreement mistake
these
On the other hand
,others athlete is prefer just walking and running in the park Linking Words
surround
by lakes and trees use free items like outdoor Wrong verb form
surrounded
Use synonyms
gym
.Because they save their money and think more Check wording
gyms
smarter
.Be healthy person is not about Replace the word
smartly
finance
it Punctuation problem
finance,
is show that
who really want be healthier and support Wrong verb form
shows
green
Correct article usage
a green
life
.Use synonyms
For example
,Linking Words
goverments
from Correct your spelling
governments
the
Germany encourage Correct article usage
apply
all
population Correct determiner usage
the
go
to the free clubs and give vegetarian items like fresh Verb problem
to go
vegatables
and fruits.
In conclusion,no matter where Correct your spelling
vegetables
people
Use synonyms
doing
Wrong verb form
do sports
Use synonyms
sport
it Punctuation problem
sport,
is depend
on their financial position and how they agree with Wrong verb form
depends
green
Correct article usage
a green
Use synonyms
life
.In my opinion, if they want Check wording
lifestyle
stay
Verb problem
to stay
fit
just start with Punctuation problem
fit,
Use synonyms
gym
and walking around parks and lakes.Result shown that it Correct article usage
the gym
is depend
on Wrong verb form
depends
Correct article usage
a person
person interesting
and Replace the word
person's interests
personality
taste.Replace the word
personal
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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. Say why gym is good and why daily activity is good in a direct way.
task response
Give your opinion in one clear line and keep the same view to the end.
task response
Use examples that are simple and closely linked to your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea for each body paragraph, then explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like first, also, for example, on the other hand, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order, so each sentence follows the one before it in a clear way.
task response
You answered both views and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
task response
You used examples to support your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite