IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The table displays fice major types of fast food eaten in Melbourne (units)

The detailed graphical
table
Use synonyms
 illustrates major categories of fast food that include hamburger, fried chicken, salad, fried rice and noodles and
its
Fix the agreement mistake
their
show examples
 consumption from 2005 to 2025 in Melbourne.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the most famous ongoing trend of fast food
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 hamburgers,
both
Use synonyms
 in 2005 and 2025, as the
units
Use synonyms
 have fluctuated from.
Afterwards
Add a comma
Afterwards,
show examples
this
Linking Words
 is followed by fried chicken, which has rapidly increased with 10
units
Use synonyms
 in the
last
Linking Words
 20 years, rising from 35 to 45.
However
Linking Words
,
both
Use synonyms
 hamburger and fried chicken currently show a marginal decrease compared to 2025, with the
units
Use synonyms
 fluctuating from 37 to 38. The concerning rise in salads
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
 substantiated that from 2005 the unit has gone up from 5 to over 41 in 2025, whilst the current consumption consists of 15
units
Use synonyms
. The remaining classifications of the
table
Use synonyms
, which are fried rice and noodles, make up the rest of the
and
Check wording
table, and
show examples
 that includes
both
Use synonyms
Linking Words
similarly
Punctuation problem
, similarly
show examples
 having just under 10. In
both
Use synonyms
 food trends, there was an increase of 3
units
Use synonyms
, from 6 to 9
from
Punctuation problem
, from
show examples
 2005 to 2025.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
table
Use synonyms
 substantiates the consumption of the most popular cuisine in Melbourne from 2005
and
Change preposition
to
show examples
 2025 and
additionally
Linking Words
 distributes the recent trends.
Therefore
Linking Words
by
Punctuation problem
, by
show examples
 examining the
table
Use synonyms
, the popularity has chosen to consume hamburgers
Punctuation problem
, the
show examples
the most
Rephrase
apply
show examples
and the least favoured from the list has been fried rice and noodles,
both
Use synonyms
 fluctuating at the same level.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words table, both, units with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: