Some people believe that environmental conservation efforts are essential for the well-being of our planet, while others argue that these efforts are unnecessary and hinder economic progress. Discuss both views and give your opinion."

In recent years, there has been
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debate about environmental
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. Some people believe that
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environmental
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efforts are essential for the well-being of our planet,
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others argue that these efforts are unnecessary and could hinder economic progress. In my opinion, protecting enviroment is extremely essential despite some economic drawbacks. On the one hand, environmental protection plays a vital role in
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maintaining
balance in nature. It will help to reduce the environmental degradation caused by pollution and deforestation.
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, it will help to protect wildlife
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and prevent serious health
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issues like climate change.
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, if
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to take proactive measures, future
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may face serious environmental crises.
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, degradation in air quality and rising global tempreture poses a serious threat to public health in many countries.
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, some people think that environmental
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could hinder economic progress.
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is because industries may need to spend more money to implement stringent environmental regulations.
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business
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businesses
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may face losses and fewer job
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may be created.
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, factories may need to lower
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production to meet environmental standards. In conclusion,
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environmental
conservation
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may involve certain costs and challenges, it is essential for the long-term survival of our planet.
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, I believe that its benefits far outweigh the disadvantages.

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Answer both sides more fully. You explain your view well, but the other side needs a bit more detail.
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Add one more clear example for each main idea. This will make your points stronger.
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Make some ideas more exact. For example, explain how rules may slow business growth.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this structure.
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Use linking words carefully. A word like 'Although' should not be used with a full stop after it.
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Some sentences are not easy to follow because of word form and grammar mistakes. Check each sentence slowly.
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Make sure each body paragraph has one main idea and clear support.
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You answer both parts of the question and give your opinion clearly.
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Your main position is clear from the introduction and the conclusion.
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The essay is organized into clear paragraphs.
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You use basic linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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