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The table below gives information on internet use in six categories by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table given represents information on how
people
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 of different ages utilise
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internet
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the internet
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 for different purposes.
Overall
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, e-mail, accounting for at least 90%, is a dominant reason why
people
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use
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 the
internet
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for
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apply
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, no matter what age group they are in.
Whereas
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people
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 showed
least
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the least
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 interest in using the
internet
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 to search for
people
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, with the highest percentage at 33
percent
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per cent
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 among
people
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 in their thirties, and 3
percent
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per cent
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 for teenagers.
Besides
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 accessing e-mail, online games
is
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are
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 a major purpose
people
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use
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 the
internet
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 for, accounting for 80% for teenagers and 88% for peopele in their twenties.
However
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,
people
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 tend to play
less
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fewer
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 games in general in later years of their lives. Online
purchase
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purchases
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 showed
steady
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a steady
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 trend among the six categories. Apart from the teenagers and elderly over 70 years old, who claim about 40%, the rest of the
people
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 report over 60% to
use
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 the
internet
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 for online
purpose
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purposes
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. Two interesting
figure
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figures
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 demonstrate how
people
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 of different age groups have different
internet
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habbits
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habits
. The young tend to
use
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 the
internet
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 to download music and
viedeo
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video
 much more than the elderly, and
on the contrary
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, the older
people
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 are, the more inclined they are to
use
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 the
internet
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 to make
traveling
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travel
 reservations.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, internet, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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