The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. It is immediately noticeable that both
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sodium
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and saturated fat
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mostly
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in
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,
while
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major
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of added sugar.
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in
breakfast
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and
snacks
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have
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the same
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.
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Breakfast
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The breakfast
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meal recorded the lowest rates across  three categories. A closer inspection of
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trends illustrates that a part of
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highest
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was
dinner
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at roughly 43
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percent
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. Lunch meals
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lower the highest approximately 29
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percent
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.
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, the lowest
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of
sodium
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was in
breakfast
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and
snacks
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at around 14
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percent
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.
Apart from
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,
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saturated
fat have
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highest
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similar
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to
sodium
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at
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37
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percent
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. Lunch and
snacks
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was
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recorded
around
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at around
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26
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percent
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and 21
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respectively.
Additionally
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,
breakfast
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have
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only
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eaten by
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around 16
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percent
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. For added sugar,
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was
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mostly added sugar at around 42
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percent
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per cent
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,
whereas
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dinner
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have
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approximately 23
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percent
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only.
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, lunch and
breakfast
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have at roughly 19
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percent
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and 16
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percent
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respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner, proportion, breakfast, snacks, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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