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In many countries, governments are investing more in public transport than in building new roads. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is considered that govenments make big interest in ouplic tranport
on the
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contrary
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, contrary
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 of buliding modern
roads
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, it
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. It
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 seems to me it's
bad
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a bad
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 improvement. First of all, the main reason that I don't agree with
this
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 movement is
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this
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that this
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 act will provide
bad
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a bad
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 look to the country or
city
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,
ragardless
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regardless
 of
fantastic
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the fantastic
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 appearance of
modern
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apply
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modern
transport
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. Areas with old
shape
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shapes
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 of
roads
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 with new
puplic
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public
transport
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 have a
worst
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worse
 structure
wou
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you
 will
see ever
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ever see
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.
Moreover
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, other companies and
businessman
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businessmen
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 will not prefer to
investment
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invest
 in the
city
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 that his government have
this
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 opinion and way to improve lifestyle in the town.
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, on 2007 Minister of tourist in Greece had cooperate with prime minister of the country for making campaign to guide investors to pay for piblic
transport
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, and he let
roads
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 and infrastructure as it be, no doubt that everyone at start of
this
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 step want to visit Greece for it's modern
transport
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 and the nation was realy glad for
this
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 resloution, when it's time for people take plane to have a wonerful experience at improvements
transport
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 they surprised that
roads
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 have shot appearance. Some
vistors
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visitors
 mention; (Altough of
it's
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its
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 high quality of tranport the country
have a
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has
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 bad
roads
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)
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apply
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. Investment in
roads
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absoulately
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absolutely
 is signaficant developement form that any
city
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must
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to
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 do.
Secondly
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, it's a negative development
some
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, some
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 new
roads
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 are still necessary in growing areas, so a balanced plan is better than only one kind of
transport
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. Balancing in
budgment
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judgment
 will reduce traffic
jam
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jams
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 and serve
thousand
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thousands
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 of
population
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people
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. There is a big population province that gave an equal
budgment
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judgment
 to these two
sides
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sides,
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then
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It
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it
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 flourished. Balancing is
good
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a good
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 way to make a pretty appearance
to
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in
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 cities.
To conclude
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, investing
at
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apply
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more in public
transport
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 than in building new
roads
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 is a bad
ruling
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decision
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,
form
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a form
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 of the
city
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and
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, and
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 balancing is a massive
evidence
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piece of evidence
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 to refute
this
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 idea.

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task response
Answer the question more clearly in the first part. Say why it is negative in a direct way.
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Give two clear main ideas and explain each one step by step.
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Use examples that are easy to understand and closely linked to your main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph stay on one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.
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You gave a clear opinion that this is a negative development.
coherence and cohesion
You included an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You tried to use an example to support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic jam
  • public transport
  • bus system
  • rail line
  • private car
  • air pollution
  • save time
  • cost less
  • daily travel
  • growing city
  • road network
  • balanced plan
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