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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntarylunpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntarylunpaid work, in your letter explain why you want to do voluntarylunpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

Dear
museum
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 director, I am Babaljit Kaur.
This
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 letter is
regarding
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apply
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to express my interest in working
voluntary
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voluntarily
 at
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museum
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the museum
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. As I was going through
news
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the news
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 yesterday, I came through urgent need at
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museum
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the museum
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 for workers to help with new art pieces arrived. Currently,
due to
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 summer holidays from my college classes, I am mostly at home, so I want to spend
this
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 time
to be
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being
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 productive.
Moreover
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,
this
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museum
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 is
on
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within
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 walking distance from my apartment. Main subjects of my studies are Art and decoration,
therefore
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having
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, having
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 experience and knowledge of almost two years of practical classes, I could be helpful by providing
helping
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a helping
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 hand to sort out the latest paintings at
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museum
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the museum
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. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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could
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 provide me
details
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with details
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 about the process
through
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so that
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 I can apply. Sincerely, Babaljit Kaur.

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task response
For task response: say more about why you want this work and add clear times when you can work.
task response
For task response: ask less and give more direct details about your skills and free time.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use clear links like 'First', 'Also', and 'Finally'.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep one main idea in each part and make the order more clear.
task response
For task response: you answer the main topic and give some reasons for your interest.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, body, and end.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time
  • voluntary/unpaid work
  • museum
  • apply
  • director
  • skills
  • qualities
  • availability
  • interest
  • opportunity
  • passion
  • contribution
  • community
  • exhibit
  • knowledge
  • communication
  • organizational
  • time management
  • flexible
  • dedicated
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