In the future, nobody will buy printed paper or books because they will be complete able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology is getting more and more advanced day by day, enabling
people
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to achieve and perform tasks, never before imagined. The possibility of switching
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paper
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from paper
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online content, and
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to saving money, seems to be an amazing future. I particularly disagree, and
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essay will explain my point of view. On one hand,
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sometimes buy printed
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only because
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there is no online option of
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content, but
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because of the experience it brings.
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, a person may purchase a book printed on
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because of the experience of feeling and touching the pages
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feeling is not possible with online content.
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, some
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might not feel comfortable signing a document online, and would rather do it with a printed
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only. It seems to me that a printed
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be necessary.
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, future technology will allow
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to buy everything they are looking for online, but it does not mean that it will be available for free.
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, the reader sometimes does not
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to publish a book, quite a lot os costs are involved,
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and those
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costs need to be paid somehow. By selling books, writers are able to get some money back for their work. Even online, a variety of products cannot be available without charge.
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or books will just be bought online, but some
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might prefer the traditional way with printed
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, as shown above. In my opinion, I disagree that a person can read everything on the internet without paying.

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Make your main answer more clear from the start. Say why you disagree in a direct way.
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Add one more clear example to show why paper books may still be bought.
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Keep your ideas closer to the question. The question is about buying printed books and reading online for free.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way. Some parts feel a bit repeated.
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Make each paragraph stay on one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Check long sentences. Some are hard to follow and need better joins or full stops.
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You give a clear opinion and you keep it through the essay.
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You include both sides of the topic before you give your final view.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraph order is easy to follow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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