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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph compares the duration three companies would have to fabricate a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.
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company
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Company
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 A and C
would
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would reduce the
time
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 taken to manufacture the fridge,
while
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Company
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 B would take the same amount of
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 to make one.
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,
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Company
 C would take the longest
time
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 to have the finished product ready
and
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, and
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company
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 A would have the shortest
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. In detail, from the graph,
company
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 B would take just over 25
minutes
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 to get the job done in 1990 and 2000, remaining relatively unchanged.
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Company
 C is projected to spend 35
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, the longest length of
time
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 at the start, but would improve to 33
minutes
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at the end
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. In comparison,
Company
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 A would
also
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 take less
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time
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apply
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production
time
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,
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however
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however,
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 it has a more marked drop in
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, moving from half
of
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an hour in 1990 to just over 20
minutes
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, time, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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