The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares the duration three companies would have to fabricate a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.
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A and C
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would reduce the
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taken to manufacture the fridge,
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B would take the same amount of
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to make one.
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,
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C would take the longest
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to have the finished product ready
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A would have the shortest
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. In detail, from the graph,
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B would take just over 25
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to get the job done in 1990 and 2000, remaining relatively unchanged.
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C is projected to spend 35
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, the longest length of
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at the start, but would improve to 33
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at the end
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. In comparison,
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A would
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take less
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time
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production
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,
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however
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it has a more marked drop in
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, moving from half
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an hour in 1990 to just over 20
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in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words company, time, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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