Some people feel that animals should have the same rights as humans but other think they are not as equal or intelligent as us so should not have the same rights. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

Animals

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in general have been heavily affected by

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humans

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activities more than they have ever been in the entire history.

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raised a heated debate on

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animals

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rights

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there is a widely believed

opinion

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that

animals

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should be treated equally

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humans

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, the belief that

animals

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should not be given the same

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because their intelligence is not equivalent to

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. Both viewpoints will be discussed in

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essay before concluding with a personal

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with, let us discuss the

opinion

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of those who believe that

animals

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and

humans

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should share the same

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. The reason for

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is none other than the fact that

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have been doing more harm than good to the

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in general, especially the wildlife. With the undeniable,

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destructive speed of their natural habitats, the wildlifes had, and are suffering from the worst mass extinction that history

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this

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leads to various campaigns

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over the world, protesting, raising

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awareness

to gain back the land that the

animals

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have lost; to fight for the

rights

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animals

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. Though

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these campaigns have led to extreme protests, claiming

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animals

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rights

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should be equal to

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. In some aspects,

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, the right of living, of having, or owning a place

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residence

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are reasonable; others sound

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unnecessary

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extreme, like studying or voting like

humans

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. The second

opinion

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, which

believe

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that

animals

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should not be given the same

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because of their unmatched intelligence

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compared to

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humans

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, has more reasonable

evidences

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to agree with. It is undoubtedly that

animals

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should have certain

rights

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, like living in harmony with

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, without being chased or hunted down, but it is necessary to limit the

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they could possibly have.

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, they should not be able to study in the same class as other

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, because it may cause some possible risks of safety to human students or

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themselves. There have been so many tragedies when

humans

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try to give the wildlife the same

rights

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humans

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, treating them as their relatives, but in the end, the wild,

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instinct of

animals

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could still possess the

animals

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, injuring their human "relatives".

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, I strongly believe that

animals

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should have certain

rights

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, but not every right as

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. They can still pose some unpredictable risks that can lead to dangerous consequences, to both

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themselves.

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task response

Answer both sides in a more even way. Your view is clear, but the first side needs a bit more full support.

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Give one or two clear real examples for each side. This will make your points stronger.

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Some ideas are good, but a few are too broad or not fully explained. Add one more line to show why each point matters.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this plan in future essays.

coherence and cohesion

Use linking words in a more natural way. Some parts feel long and heavy.

coherence and cohesion

Make each paragraph focus on one main idea only, then explain it step by step.

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You discussed both views and gave your own opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Your introduction and conclusion are both clear and easy to follow.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a logical order: first one side, then the other side, then your view.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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397 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Ethical treatment
Cognitive functions
Hierarchy of rights
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