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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
households
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 in the US by their annual
imcome
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income
. The data was recorded in 2007, 2011, and
2015
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2015,
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 respectively. The
number
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 of
households
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 gaining more than $100000 annually remained the highest over 3 years.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of second-earning
households
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 was stably the lowest, which was around 15
millions
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. The
number
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 of
households
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who
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that
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 earn between $50000 to $74999 had the most steady performance. It
maintained
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is maintained
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 at 20
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millions
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million
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 approximately. The
number
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 of
households
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who
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that
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 earned less than $4999 was between 25
to
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and
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 30
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millions
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million
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. It grew from 2007 to 2011 and slightly declined by 2015. The chart
also
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 demonstrates the extreme situation between rich and poor
households
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 in the US.
Whereas
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 the
nimbers
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numbers
 of
mid-class
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middle-class
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households
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(who
earns
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earn
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 between $50000 to $99999) were both much lower, those of the best-earning
households
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 and the least-earning
households
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 were both higher than 25
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millions
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million
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;
furthermore
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, those who had the higherst annul income were still increasing over time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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