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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
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 educators of primary, lower secondary and upper secondary schools spent teaching in the
USA
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,
Japan
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,
Spain
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 and Ireland.
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,
teachers
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 logged the most
time
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 teaching in upper secondary and the least in primary
school
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 across all the nations.
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, the
USA
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 is the category that recorded the most
hours
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 of teaching in every
school
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 type,
whereas
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Japan
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 logged the fewest
hours
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. Upper secondary and lower secondary schools represent the institutions where the most
hours
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 were recorded. Upper secondary
school
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 teaching
time
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 peaked at 1200
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 in the
USA
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,
while
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 identical periods were spent teaching in
Spain
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 and Ireland at 900
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.
However
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,
Japan
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's
teachers
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dedicated
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registered half of the
USA
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's figure, the smallest share of all. Meanwhile, lower secondary schools accounted for the
second highest
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second-highest
 group;
teachers
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 in the US taught for 1000
hours
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, leading
Spain
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 and Iceland, where each tallied approximately 600
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, 100
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 fewer than
Japan
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. Contrastingly, primary
school
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teachers
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 allocated the least amount of
time
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 to lessons, recording approximately 600
hours
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 each in
Spain
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 and
Japan
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, just under that figure in Iceland,
while
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 recording 720
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 in the
USA
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, usa, japan, spain, teachers, school, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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