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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education in a team with the other learners by the living way more useful than studying virtually at home. In my opinion, there are advantages and
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 disadvantages to. I think it should depend on what kind of sphere will be studied.
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, in the medical sphere, people have to study only offline with the other group of
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. Because of
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 medical area, as we know, connectef with human health. Body If we speak about advantages in a group of
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 in a schoolroom,
students
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 can gain main information live by sensing teachers' emotions. And
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, in a
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 there is always a competition between
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. But there is a disadvantage that in our community, we have different types of people who live in the mix of types of positions , like having kids or situations like not having the opportunity to go out. For these kinds of people, it would not be convenient. For them, the best bersion studying online at home. Conclusion In conclusion education system needs to organize system depending on the situation.

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Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same idea all through the essay.
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Add more main ideas and explain each one more. Some points are too short, so the reader cannot fully see your meaning.
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Use one or two clear examples that directly fit your ideas. The medical example is good, but it needs more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make your essay easier to follow with clear paragraphing: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
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Link ideas in a simple way. Use words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main point support the topic. Some parts are not fully developed, so the flow feels weak.
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You answer the topic and talk about both classroom study and online study.
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You give a real example about medical study, which fits the topic.
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Your essay has an introduction, a body, and a conclusion.
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There is some simple linking, such as for example and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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