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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Education in a team with the other learners by the living way more useful than studying virtually at home. In my
opinion
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 there are advantages and
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 disadvantages to. I think it should
be depends
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 on
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apply
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the
what
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kind of sphere
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that will
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study
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example
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 in the medical
sphere
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 people have to study only
with the
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apply
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offline
way
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apply
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with the other group of
students
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. Because of
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 medical area
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 we know
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, connectef
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 with human health. If we
will
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apply
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speak about advantages in a group of
students
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 in a schoolroom,
students
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 can gain main information live by
sense
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teachers
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teachers'
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 emotions. And
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also
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 in a team always
exists
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apply
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competition between
students
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. But there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 that in our community we have different types
people
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of people
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 who live in
the
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like
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, like
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 having kids or
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situations
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 like not having
opportunity
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the opportunity
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going
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 out. For
this
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 kind of people it would
be not
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 convenient.
Fpr
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 them
will
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 the best bersion studying online at home. In conclusion education system
need
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 to organize system depending
situation
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on the situation
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Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Add one or two simple examples to support your main ideas.
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Explain your ideas more. Some points are good, but they are too short.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like because, also, but, for example, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easy to follow. Some parts are hard to understand now.
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You answer both sides of the topic: classroom study and online study.
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You give a real area example: medical study needs face-to-face learning.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like for example, but, and in conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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