The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures illustrate the
process
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of how
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sugar
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is made from
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sugar
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cane.
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, there are seven
distincts
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distinct
steps, which can be
categorized
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into two main stages: collecting and producing.
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process
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mainly is
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done
by
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automatically. Regarding collecting, the adult canes from twelve to eighteen months are harvested in two ways: by
auto
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an auto
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machine or
farmer
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a farmer
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. These canes
after
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that, are put inside the crush machine to collect the juice. In terms of
producing
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production
, the liquid is stored inside the purifying juice, which has
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thin limestone filter within.
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uses
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to eliminate the sand and dirt. Once the
substain
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substance
is finished, it is held within the evaporator.
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process
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turn
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the juice into syrups by heating.
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, the left
sugar
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crystals are separated from the syrup through the centrifuge
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. The
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delicate
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syrup eventually stores inside the iron machine to continue drying and cooling;
therefore
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, the
sugar
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in daily usage
is appeared
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appears
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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