IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The maps below show a coal mining site before and after redevelopment.

The maps illustrate the infrastructure of
coal
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the coal
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 mine before and after
reconstruct
Replace the word
reconstruction
.
Overall
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, it is clear from these maps that many changes happened during development:
the
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including the
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replacements
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replacement
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 of most structures, and other alterations
included
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, such as
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 the construction of areas for picnics and entertainment for children. Before reconstruction,
office
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the office
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 was located on the north-west corner and
car
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the car
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park
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 on the south-west, with
staff
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the staff
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 changing room right
betwee
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between
 these two. On the east,
however
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, 2 waste tips
situated
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are situated
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: the former on the north, and
latter
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the latter
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 on the south. Entrance for mine had
took
Wrong verb form
taken
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 place on the north of the site, and
lorry
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a lorry
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park
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 on the opposite - south, with
medical
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a medical
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 room in the centre. After redevelopment, almost everything had
a change
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changed
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, except the car
park
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, which remained untouched. Both
office
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the office
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 and
changing
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the changing
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 rooms were merged together and turned into
museum
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a museum
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. Entrance for mine, which was only for workers,
now
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is now
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 available for visitors, and
medical
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the medical
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 room
replaced
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has been replaced
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 with
cafe
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a cafe
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. Lorry
park
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 has gone
and
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, and
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 in its place is
souvenir
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a souvenir
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 shop now. Both waste tips were replaced with
digger
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a digger
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 driving track on the north,
picnic
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a picnic
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 area
on
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in
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 the middle, and
children's
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a children's
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 playing area on the south.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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