The maps give information about the changes that have taken place in Flexstone from 1967 to 2001.

The maps provide the key information about the transformations that have taken place in Flexstone from 1967 to 2001.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the area
had
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has
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seen significant development, with Farmland and Pier being the most noticeable
one
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ones
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.
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, some parts were replaced or destroyed. First of all, in the northern part, Farmland had been turned into a modern hotel which had sports facilities,
such
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as the swimming pool and tennis courts. The building on the right side of the high street, which was Shops, had started being used as Apartments. Shops on the left side of the street had remained the same as
Golf
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the golf
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course. In the southern part, the first change was a private beach where
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the
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Fish market had been situated
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moreover
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, the beach had slightly shifted towards the sea.
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, Marina and Pier had been replaced with
public
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a public
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beach. The hotel next to Dunes had
completely
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been completely
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upgraded,
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example
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the car park had been added. After that, Wind turbines
had been
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were
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built in the southern part of
Dunes
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the dunes
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, near the sea.
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, Dunes had remained untouched.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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