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Some people believe that it is better for students learning language in small classes. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, more and more
students
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 have started to learn languages. Some people believe studying in small
classes
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 is
a
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the
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 best way for learning
language
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. I absolutely agree with
this
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 idea because in small groups you can directly get
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a reply
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 from
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the teacher
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 and improve your level by
communication
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communicating
 with other
students
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. On the one hand, using small groups for learning
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language
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a language
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 is a very efficient method.
For example
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, a small group includes only three or four
students
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, each student has
own
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their own
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 time for asking a question and getting
correctly
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a correct
 reply from
teacher
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the teacher
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.
In addition
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, you can feel more
convinient
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convenient
 and better understand
a
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the
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 content because of
small
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a small
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 number of
students
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.
Moreover
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, studying in
classes
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 can provide more information about
language
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 and allow
to
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one to
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 see different opinions and ideas from other
students
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.
On the other hand
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, it is not always necessary to choose
studying
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to study
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 in small
classes
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. Some people who do not like groups, they prefer to study by themselves.
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,
you
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if you
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 do not like sharing your time with other people, you can use online platforms for studying without anyone.
Moreover
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, you can consider studying with a personal teacher, but it will be more expensive. In conclusion,
although
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students
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 prefer to study alone,
i
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I
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 strongly believe that the best way for learning
language
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 is studying in small
classes
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 with different
students
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.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. You say you agree, but body 2 gives time to people who study alone. This makes your main view less clear.
task response
Give stronger support for your main idea. Add one more clear example of how small classes help language learning.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main point easy to follow. Start each body paragraph with one clear idea, then explain it, then give one example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully, like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'as a result'. This will make the essay flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. The second body paragraph should still support your opinion or clearly show why the other view is weaker.
task response
You clearly state your opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear basic structure: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task response
You use a relevant example about students asking questions in a small class.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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