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Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every five years. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

In recent
years
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, it has become compulsory for
people
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 to retake their driving
test
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 every five
years
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.
While
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 it offers several advantages, it
also
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 presents drawbacks.
This
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driving
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test
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 every five
years
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 provides significant benefits,
such
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 as
health
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a health
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 check-up or
peoples
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people's
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 driving
skills
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. As
people
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 get older, they begin to lose their coordination
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, which
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 can impact
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their
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 driving
skills
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 and
led
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lead
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 to car accidents in the future.
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Furthermore
, retaking can help to find your driving weaknesses and improve them quickly.
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, there are some
people
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 who do not know all the driving rules or confuse them. Checking
peoples
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 driving
skills
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 regularly
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 can reduce
risks
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the risks
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 of accidents in the near future.
On the other hand
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, these tests may have disadvantages.
People
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 may fail the
test
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 because of getting nervous.
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, some
people
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afraid
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are afraid
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taking
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of taking
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an
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apply
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driving exams because it
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may
hard
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be hard
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 to concentrate when you are
seating
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sitting
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 with a person who controls and checks your
each
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every
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 step.
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, the vehicle you are driving during the
test
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,
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 might not be right for you.
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, you used to drive a big car, but
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test
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the test
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 only provides a small and old car, and it will be difficult for you to get used
it
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to it
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 quickly. In conclusion,
although
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 taking a driving
test
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 may bring some difficulties, it
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also can
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can also
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 help
people
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 reduce risks and improve
your
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their
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skills
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. I strongly
with
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agree with
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idea
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the idea
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 that
people
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 should retake tests every five
years
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.

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Answer both sides in a more equal way. Add one more clear point for each side.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea in each body paragraph very clear at the start.
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Use examples that are more specific and easy to follow.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and for example.
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Keep the same view in the end. Your last line gives a strong opinion, but the task asks for advantages and disadvantages.
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Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You answered both advantages and disadvantages.
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You have a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
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Your essay has a simple 4-part structure, which is easy to follow.
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You tried to give examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • retake
  • enhanced
  • mitigation
  • logistical challenges
  • financial burden
  • capabilities
  • independence
  • stress and anxiety
  • reinforcement
  • road rules
  • administrative
  • insurance premiums
  • decline
  • government agencies
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