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The table below gives information on customer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table displays the rate and categories consumers spent in Iceland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and
Turkey
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 in 2002. The figures in the table
indicated
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indicate
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 that expenditure
in
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on
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food
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 was the
primary
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largest
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 among
five
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the five
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countries
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,
while
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 clothing took
the
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apply
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second place and the least
in
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on
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 leisure or education.
Turkey
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 witnessed the highest level of spending
in
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on
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food
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 and drinks at 32.14%. Followed by Iceland
, showing
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follows, showing
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 28.91% in
this
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 category. The
food
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cost
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costs
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 in Italy, Spain, and Sweden were similar, with 18.80%, 16.36% and 15.77% repectively. Different from
food
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 expenditure, Italy exhibited the highest clothing and shoes spending at 9.00%, which was much lower than that of
food
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.
Other
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The other
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 four
countries
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 recorded
similar
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a similar
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 prevalence of cost in
this
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 column at around 6%. It is worth mentioning that people in Spain only spent 1.98% of
total
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the total
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 cost in leisure or education, which was the lowest in all categories and
countries
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.
Turkey
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 was observed spending the highest
money
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amount
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 in
this
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 section with 4.35% of
total
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the total
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 amount.
Overall
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, people in these five
countries
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 spent the most
in
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on
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 meals
while
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least
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the least
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in
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on
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 unnecessary
stuffs
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stuff
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 in life,
such
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 as leisure and education.
Turkey
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 was the country that paid more attention
in
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to
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 entertainment.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, food, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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