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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The maps compare changes around the
city
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 of Nelson in recent times.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the university has remained unchanged, many amenities have been added to
some
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apply
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certain places, including
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 and
port
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the port
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. Some buildings have been removed or replaced
to
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with
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 new ones throughout the period.
To begin
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 with, the hall of residence and new shopping
center
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centre
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 have been constructed next to the university in today's
city
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,
whereas
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 there was
anything
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nothing
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 except trees in
this
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 area in 2000.
In addition
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,
new
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a new
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 train station has been rebuilt with
tramline
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a tramline
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 below the university
instead
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 of
old
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the old
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 train station.
Furthermore
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,
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 has been
modernized
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modernised
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 by adding
bike
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a bike
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 rental scheme in recent years.
Additionally
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,
old
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the old
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 market has been replaced to new shop, and
also
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new
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a new
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 covered market has been constructed in today's Nelson. In the port, new restaurant and
bars
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, bars
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 and clubs
has
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have
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 been built
and
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, and
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 the way has been removed
and
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, and
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this
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 has been for pedestrians only in contemporary Nelson.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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