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One of the widely discussed issues these days is the importance of teaching children to distinguish right from wrong at an early age.

Most argued topics nowadays
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This
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awareness
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 a child's character .By teaching them young, you help them yearn
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, you teach them how to communicate with strangers. Starting with how to say the phrases "Thank you" and "Please". Including confidence is a
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 rule in a parent's teaching strategy. Introducing them to learn right from wrong pushes them to always state their
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 everyone,
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, being aware of what is right
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Write the first sentence more clearly. Say your idea in a simple and correct way.
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Answer the full question more directly. You say you agree, but explain more why this is important.
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Give one or two clear examples with more detail. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make one clear main idea in each body part. Some lines are hard to follow now.
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Use easy linking words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts feel broken.
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You have a clear opinion from the start.
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You include an example about speaking to strangers and using polite words.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to group ideas about awareness and confidence.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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