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Many people believe that reading books is a better way to learn than watching television or listening to podcasts. Why do you think this is the case? Do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 think that reading
books
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 is a better way to learn
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instead of
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than
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 watching television or listening to podcasts. I absolutely agree with
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 opinion because reading
books
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 makes
people
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 think more and
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makes
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 their brain works hard. On the one hand, reading
books
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 helps
people
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 develop important skills
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 as concentration and critical thinking. During the
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reading,
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 humans improve their vocabulary and imagination. These skills are very important for their future life.
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, through reading
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books
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books,
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 students can
analyze
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analyse
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 information and create their own opinion
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, which
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is very
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 important in social life.
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, reading
books
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 is a good
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way to spend time
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, especially during
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time
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period.
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, watching television and listening to
podcats
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podcasts
also
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 have some benefits. First of all, it
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helps
people
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 to relax and make their education more
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fun
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 and interesting.
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, it helps them deeply and clearly understand the content. In conclusion,
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 using television or
podcats
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podcasts
 for learning
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makes
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people
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 feel more relaxed,
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I
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 believe that reading
books
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 is better for learning because it helps them concentrate more and develop important skills.

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Answer both parts more fully. You say why books are good, but your view on TV and podcasts is short.
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Add one more clear example. This will make your ideas stronger and easier to believe.
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Explain your main ideas more. For example, say how reading builds focus and how this helps study or work.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this shape.
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Some links are good, like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', but some parts do not flow well. Use simple links carefully.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main idea. The line about books being a good way to spend time does not fully support learning.
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You clearly give your opinion in the first paragraph and keep it to the end.
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You discuss both books and other media, so the essay covers the full topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas are easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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